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  • Hypersexualization of children (2)

  • The real problem of this beauty contest is mother excess for ours “little princess” in order to be the most beautiful.
  • In fact, they have excess makeup and wigs.
  • They bring high-heel, reals fur coats and has diamonds.
  • The worst is some of them participate of competitive pole dance or use UV machine all the day in order to have good suntan.
  • Furthermore, they bring string for 8 years old which make for this little miss contest.
  • When a litlle girl win the contest, she bring back trophy and large sum of money that only her mother can receive That why, in France, in August, 4th 2015, the Parliament had voted that children aged less than 13 years old can’t participate of beauty contest.
  • Transgressor will have a fine of 30 000 euros and 2 years of imprisonment.
  • This measure had been taken for contribute a struggle of hypersexualization and precocious erotization.
  • In United States, there are lot of beauties contests and there is a reality TV whose name is “Toddlers and Tiaras”.
  • But this contest has worsen because of make up, spray tan and some little girls bring mammary prosthesis For illustrated, we have found Bree story.
  • She is 7 years old and like Britney she has botox injection every three months by his mother, Sharon who is beautician.
  • She wants that her daughter will became a star.
  • That why she bought a product online for fiil Bree lips.
  • Furthermore, she took tatoo lessons in order to realise permanent eyebrow.
  • The reason why Sharon intervene on her daughter is because lot of doctor have refused to intervene on Bree so Sharon take responsibility for Bree will become a celebrity II- Consequences and solutions Pedophilia Concerning consequences of this phenomenon, Again, look at this girl (3).
  • She was 10 in this photo, but her posture and expression indicate that she was at least 16 years old.
  • So, it’s a reality, and we have to be aware of this: hypersexualization cause an increase of pedophilia.
  • Indeed, they look like women, so, they are more attractives for men.
  • The article 222-24 of penal code punished pedophiles (who have sex with a child) of 20 years of imprisonment.
  • Moreover, in France, article 222-25 of penal code says that sexual majority is fifteen years old : this number indicate the moment where a person can to decide to have sexual relations.
  • So, this threshold should exist to be sexy, that is to pose for photo with makeup and anything else.
  • Ravages to children’s development : Hypersexualization of young girls is a curse for children’s candor : it impact their development.
  • Indeed, you are supposed to progress during your life, first you wear pokemon tee shirts, and THEN you wear mini-skirt and high-heel (and it’s not an obligation, if you want to be class…).
  • Opinion: To remedy of this problem, law should intervene and to forbid UV machines for children, epilation and others methods normally reserved for adults.
  • Furthermore, it’s necessary to make industries aware of their responsibility : they have to stop to produce little shoes with high-heel, little string or little dress with plunging neckline.
  • Then, parents are also a role to play : protect their children.
  • That goes without saying but, obviously, not for everyone.
  • So, parents who buy sexy clothes should be punished of a fine, or at least of a warning.
  • So, you had understood : if you ask about our opinion, sparks are going to fly!
  • To conclude, hypersexualization is a curse that affect an entire generation and indirectly futures generations.
  • So, it’s necessary to limit this now!
  • However, a case is always forgotten : little boys are also victims of hypersexualisation.
  • Indeed, some of them starting at 10 years to build themselves (5) : In front of hypersexualization of little girls, they have to respond.
  • Their picture must correspond with girl’s appearance.
  • Sadly, it’s a spiral : impossible to stop her without take drastic steps!
  • Education is a sensitive subject, it’s difficult to legislate about this.
  • Indeed, it’s a liberty for parents, the politic autority can’t intervene in an interne problematic.

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    • The real problem of this beauty contest is mother excess for ours “little princess” in order to be the most beautiful.
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    • The worst is some of them participate of competitive pole dance or use UV machine all the day in order to have good suntan.
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    • When a litlle girl win the contest, she bring back trophy and large sum of money that only her mother can receive That why, in France, in August, 4th 2015, the Parliament had voted that children aged less than 13 years old can’t participate of beauty contest.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 6ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 6
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    • This measure had been taken for contribute a struggle of hypersexualization and precocious erotization.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 8ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 8
  • câu 9
    • In United States, there are lot of beauties contests and there is a reality TV whose name is “Toddlers and Tiaras”.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 9ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 9
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    • But this contest has worsen because of make up, spray tan and some little girls bring mammary prosthesis For illustrated, we have found Bree story.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 10ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 10
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    • She is 7 years old and like Britney she has botox injection every three months by his mother, Sharon who is beautician.
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    • The reason why Sharon intervene on her daughter is because lot of doctor have refused to intervene on Bree so Sharon take responsibility for Bree will become a celebrity II- Consequences and solutions Pedophilia Concerning consequences of this phenomenon, Again, look at this girl (3).
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 15ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 15
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    • So, it’s a reality, and we have to be aware of this: hypersexualization cause an increase of pedophilia.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 17ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 17
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    • The article 222-24 of penal code punished pedophiles (who have sex with a child) of 20 years of imprisonment.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 19ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 19
  • câu 20
    • Moreover, in France, article 222-25 of penal code says that sexual majority is fifteen years old : this number indicate the moment where a person can to decide to have sexual relations.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 20ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 20
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    • Ravages to children’s development : Hypersexualization of young girls is a curse for children’s candor : it impact their development.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 22ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 22
  • câu 23
    • Indeed, you are supposed to progress during your life, first you wear pokemon tee shirts, and THEN you wear mini-skirt and high-heel (and it’s not an obligation, if you want to be class…).
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 23ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 23
  • câu 24
    • Opinion: To remedy of this problem, law should intervene and to forbid UV machines for children, epilation and others methods normally reserved for adults.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 24ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 24
  • câu 25
    • Furthermore, it’s necessary to make industries aware of their responsibility : they have to stop to produce little shoes with high-heel, little string or little dress with plunging neckline.
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    • To conclude, hypersexualization is a curse that affect an entire generation and indirectly futures generations.
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    • Indeed, some of them starting at 10 years to build themselves (5) : In front of hypersexualization of little girls, they have to respond.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 33ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 33
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