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  • Technological progress

  • The idea of progress can be defined as an evolution, a development or a change – a technical, scientific or social advance which leads to an overall improvement.
  • The twenty-first century's major progress is the development of technology : nowadays everybody as a smartphone, whereas no one could have imagine that fifty years ago.
  • This change was so quick and so abrupt, that it drove a wedge between two generations.
  • So we can ask : «  To what extend technological progress could be totally good ?
  • First we'll see the bright side of this progress, then we will look into the negative aspects.
  • Our father's chilhood was acutally really diffenrent than their : after school they used to do their homework and then go for a walk with their friends.
  • They used to ride every week for hours beside a river, play in the street or in the forest..
  • If they were far away from their friend, they had to exchange letters or if they were lucky, they could called them but it was thanks to a corded phone, so they were beside their parents and they had to pay for.
  • Whereas now, all teenagers have a smartphone or a computer, and a lot spend most of their time on videos games or tv.
  • They had a phone which's almost become a part of their hand.
  • On the one hand, the technology could be a really beneficial thing.
  • Indeed, the web is a source of an enourmous quantity of information : it allows each to access to ressources and assure an certain equality face to the knowledge, which makes a big difference with the previous generation.
  • Moreover, the possibilities' extent are so important that web surfers can satisfy their curiosity and discover others cultures, others ways of life, which is rewarding.
  • Thanks to the web you can encounter person of any place in the world, and exchange with others require a tolerant's development.
  • This is a fact, nowadays young people are more mature than they used to be, and the cultural apport of the web could be a reason.
  • This fact could be explained thanks to another good point of internet : the community.
  • People, surfing on the web, can find people which share their opinions, their tastes, their hoobies...With people regroupments, each could belong to a community, etablish ties with people, make friend..
  • Texts messages, and social networks are offering everyday an amazing social ties' flow.
  • Thanks to them, the link is never broken, despite a physical separation.
  • They are always connected with each other and feeling envelopped might be a factor or happiness.
  • Still, there is the other side of the coin.
  • Actually, despite few people know that : technologicals devices are bad for health.
  • For the sleep because of the evening utilisation, for the brain because of waves, and for eyes, that can't stand a too long time of exposition etc..
  • Teenagers are used to spend so much time on the net, that a lot botch their homework, which is a bad thing.
  • Moreover, they don't read anymore before sleeping, they all prefer tchatting on their phone.
  • So their spelling deteriorates, and they lose a part of their imagination.
  • The web presents an other big drawback : there are a lot of dangerous sites, which encourages violence and pornography.
  • Nowadays, teenagers are confronted everyday at chocking pictures, videos etc..
  • However, this is the way where teenagers are contacted by jihadist and enlist over there.
  • To be short, we could say the technological progress isn't bad in itself, this is his use who might be harmful or dangerous.

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    • The idea of progress can be defined as an evolution, a development or a change – a technical, scientific or social advance which leads to an overall improvement.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 1ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 1
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    • The twenty-first century's major progress is the development of technology : nowadays everybody as a smartphone, whereas no one could have imagine that fifty years ago.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 2ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 2
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    • Our father's chilhood was acutally really diffenrent than their : after school they used to do their homework and then go for a walk with their friends.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 6ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 6
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    • If they were far away from their friend, they had to exchange letters or if they were lucky, they could called them but it was thanks to a corded phone, so they were beside their parents and they had to pay for.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 8ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 8
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    • Whereas now, all teenagers have a smartphone or a computer, and a lot spend most of their time on videos games or tv.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 9ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 9
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    • Indeed, the web is a source of an enourmous quantity of information : it allows each to access to ressources and assure an certain equality face to the knowledge, which makes a big difference with the previous generation.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 12ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 12
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    • Moreover, the possibilities' extent are so important that web surfers can satisfy their curiosity and discover others cultures, others ways of life, which is rewarding.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 13ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 13
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    • Thanks to the web you can encounter person of any place in the world, and exchange with others require a tolerant's development.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 14ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 14
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    • This is a fact, nowadays young people are more mature than they used to be, and the cultural apport of the web could be a reason.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 15ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 15
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    • People, surfing on the web, can find people which share their opinions, their tastes, their hoobies...With people regroupments, each could belong to a community, etablish ties with people, make friend..
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 17ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 17
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    • For the sleep because of the evening utilisation, for the brain because of waves, and for eyes, that can't stand a too long time of exposition etc..
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 23ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 23
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    • The web presents an other big drawback : there are a lot of dangerous sites, which encourages violence and pornography.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 27ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 27
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    • To be short, we could say the technological progress isn't bad in itself, this is his use who might be harmful or dangerous.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 30ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 30