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Practice English for IELTS band 5.0
I am studying English on the Complete IELTS bands 4.0-5.0 book.
This is my first writing.
The chart provides information about which transport used during visit of the international people go to New Zealand.
The most popular transport is car, which 68 percent of visitors use it.
Plane and coach are used almost the same amount, about 31 percent.
Another 20 percent of visitors travelled by train.
However, 7 percent use boat for going.
Overall, most visitors go to New Zealand used private transport more popular than public transport.

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- Practice English for IELTS band 5.0
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- I am studying English on the Complete IELTS bands 4.0-5.0 book.
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- This is my first writing.
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- The chart provides information about which transport used during visit of the international people go to New Zealand.
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- The most popular transport is car, which 68 percent of visitors use it.
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- Plane and coach are used almost the same amount, about 31 percent.
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- Another 20 percent of visitors travelled by train.
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- However, 7 percent use boat for going.
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- Overall, most visitors go to New Zealand used private transport more popular than public transport.
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