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  • To begin with, one of the biggest problems that older women facing is the stereotype of housewife work being a natural obligation.
  • Nowadays, the civilization asserts that the ability of women to maintain the organization and the cleaning is a gift of their nature.
  • For example, “cooking, cleaning, caring, being teacher and nurse …” is the responsibility of them for love to their family.
  • To solve this problem, the society, principally children and husbands within families should change these ideas.
  • For instance, the education in the houses and schools, also the policies could consider the domestics task a job done by women as any other job.
  • As a result of such action, the older women will have the same opportunities for do other different jobs to be housewife.

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  • 문장 1
    • To begin with, one of the biggest problems that older women facing is the stereotype of housewife work being a natural obligation.
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  • 문장 2
    • Nowadays, the civilization asserts that the ability of women to maintain the organization and the cleaning is a gift of their nature.
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  • 문장 3
    • For example, “cooking, cleaning, caring, being teacher and nurse …” is the responsibility of them for love to their family.
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  • 문장 4
    • To solve this problem, the society, principally children and husbands within families should change these ideas.
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  • 문장 5
    • For instance, the education in the houses and schools, also the policies could consider the domestics task a job done by women as any other job.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 5ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 5
  • 문장 6
    • As a result of such action, the older women will have the same opportunities for do other different jobs to be housewife.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 6ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 6