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  • Please make some corrections on my cover letter, as I would like to get a summer job!
  • Here it is "I was excited to see your opening for a refund assistant advertised on finn.no, and I hope to be invited for an interview.
  • During my first job working as a salesman I gained experience in a customer service sector, which helped me to prepare myself for a client-oriented role.
  • This knowledge now allows me to find the best possible solution and adapt to any environment and every circumstance in communication.
  • My cheerful, energised attitude towards work, combined with my business savvy, landed me my first professional achievement – ranking me in TOP10 best sellers in company out of more than 200 contestants in summer’s seller’s campaign.
  • Working as a sales manager, I grew more as a team member and understood how to cooperate with individuals with different personalities.
  • Moreover, I learned to rationally organize and plan work in a high-paced, stressful job.
  • Also, I would like you to know that I have acquired basic Norwegian language knowledge, which I intentionally picked as one of my courses during this semester’s studies, and worked as a volunteer bartender in Kroa i Bø youth center.
  • All in all, I believe I’m a strong candidate for this job and I have the expertise to become an integral part of your team.
  • I consider .... a prestigious company and the chance to join your team would be a tremendous opportunity and honour.
  • Thank You for your time and consideration."

PLEASE, HELP TO CORRECT EACH SENTENCE! - English

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    • Here it is "I was excited to see your opening for a refund assistant advertised on finn.no, and I hope to be invited for an interview.
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  • Sentence 3
    • During my first job working as a salesman I gained experience in a customer service sector, which helped me to prepare myself for a client-oriented role.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 3ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 3
  • Sentence 4
    • This knowledge now allows me to find the best possible solution and adapt to any environment and every circumstance in communication.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 4ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 4
  • Sentence 5
    • My cheerful, energised attitude towards work, combined with my business savvy, landed me my first professional achievement – ranking me in TOP10 best sellers in company out of more than 200 contestants in summer’s seller’s campaign.
      Vote now!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 5ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 5
  • Sentence 6
    • Working as a sales manager, I grew more as a team member and understood how to cooperate with individuals with different personalities.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 6ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 6
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    • Also, I would like you to know that I have acquired basic Norwegian language knowledge, which I intentionally picked as one of my courses during this semester’s studies, and worked as a volunteer bartender in Kroa i Bø youth center.
      Vote now!
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