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  • The shopping center report (C2 exam)

  • Introduction Having been asked from the Council members to write a report about the Shopping center impact on our city I will try to do my best on behalf of our citizenship.
  • I aim to balance on the one hand the second-to-none design of our mall which has become an indoor city perfect for the winter days; and, on the other hand,it is to blame for the disappearing of traditional shops.
  • Rave views and drawbacks over the big shopping center: Firstly, I have a long list of positive facts to say about the effects of the new mall on our city.
  • Regarding the people answers to our survay, it has turned to be a snug environment where families go to spend time with their children.
  • It is true that a lively atmosphere,- amongst top-ten restaurants and leisurely activities such as cinema, amusement park...-, can be easily felt.
  • In addition many new jobs have been created: security guards, children instructors, waiters, waitresses, ushers, usherettes...but they are part time jobs.
  • Eventually, the drawbacks have to do with several aspects: 1st) The location on the outskirts makes it difficult to arrive at without a car, due to the low frequency of public transport.
  • 2nd) Local and traditional shops are going into bankrupcy, and this fact could end obliging all of us to drive to buy at the cheaperand in the end unique mall.
  • People tend to spend several hours enjoying while buying on a daily basis, consequently the do not buy at the shops near their houses.
  • Future developments: I would suggest to increase the frequency on public transport, and if we wanted to avoid the waping-out of local shoppers I would create a Union linked to the council in a way that we might allow the shoppers to run or take an important part in the local festivals when they take place, so by "making a killing" in some days along a year they could survive almost the rest of it.

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  • Sentence 1
    • Introduction Having been asked from the Council members to write a report about the Shopping center impact on our city I will try to do my best on behalf of our citizenship.
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  • Sentence 2
    • I aim to balance on the one hand the second-to-none design of our mall which has become an indoor city perfect for the winter days; and, on the other hand,it is to blame for the disappearing of traditional shops.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 2ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 2
  • Sentence 3
    • Rave views and drawbacks over the big shopping center: Firstly, I have a long list of positive facts to say about the effects of the new mall on our city.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 3ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 3
  • Sentence 4
    • Regarding the people answers to our survay, it has turned to be a snug environment where families go to spend time with their children.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 4ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 4
  • Sentence 5
    • It is true that a lively atmosphere,- amongst top-ten restaurants and leisurely activities such as cinema, amusement park...-, can be easily felt.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 5ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 5
  • Sentence 6
    • In addition many new jobs have been created: security guards, children instructors, waiters, waitresses, ushers, usherettes...but they are part time jobs.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 6ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 6
  • Sentence 7
    • Eventually, the drawbacks have to do with several aspects: 1st) The location on the outskirts makes it difficult to arrive at without a car, due to the low frequency of public transport.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 7ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 7
  • Sentence 8
    • 2nd) Local and traditional shops are going into bankrupcy, and this fact could end obliging all of us to drive to buy at the cheaperand in the end unique mall.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 8ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 8
  • Sentence 9
    • People tend to spend several hours enjoying while buying on a daily basis, consequently the do not buy at the shops near their houses.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 9ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 9
  • Sentence 10
    • Future developments: I would suggest to increase the frequency on public transport, and if we wanted to avoid the waping-out of local shoppers I would create a Union linked to the council in a way that we might allow the shoppers to run or take an important part in the local festivals when they take place, so by "making a killing" in some days along a year they could survive almost the rest of it.
      Vote now!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 10ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 10