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  • Should the elderly receive free bus rides?

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  • Should the elderly receive free bus rides?
  • Looking at the question you may be wondering why not, but is it actually a good idea?
  • In my opinion there are two main points of view concerned in this debate.
  • Economics on one hand and social well-being on the other hand.
  • From an economical point of view it is a disastrous proposal to provide the elderly with free bus rides.
  • Not only would busses become to full to sustainably transport the people, but also would transportation companies suffer severely from the fall in income.
  • Especially in this era in which senescence is an upcoming social issue.
  • From an social point of view it is a great idea to provide old people with free bus rides, because with that governments give the signal to be there for their inhabitants rather than ruling them.
  • Although it seems to be a good idea from this point of view, it must be mentioned that it may causes problems.
  • When older people get free bus rides and are a majority of the population, whereas younger people do not and are a minority of the population, there may arise feelings of social inequality.
  • In my opinion it is a bad idea to provide the elderly with free bus rides, because the senescence can't be ignored.
  • Since a social issue is more important to take into account than a 'normal' issue, I think people should support the economists.

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    • Note before the actual writing: This essay is written with a given topic, so the ideas expressed may not be my own.......
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    • Not only would busses become to full to sustainably transport the people, but also would transportation companies suffer severely from the fall in income.
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    • From an social point of view it is a great idea to provide old people with free bus rides, because with that governments give the signal to be there for their inhabitants rather than ruling them.
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    • When older people get free bus rides and are a majority of the population, whereas younger people do not and are a minority of the population, there may arise feelings of social inequality.
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    • Since a social issue is more important to take into account than a 'normal' issue, I think people should support the economists.
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