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Text from Juliejing - English

  • a writing practice in IELTS test

  • Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news.
  • Do you agree or disagree?
  • The innovation of social media has changed readers' reading habits with an increasing number of people reading news online rather than on newspapers.
  • Whereas some people still hold an opposite view on this trend, therefore I would argue that printed newspapers will be superseded by online news in the future.
  • Firstly, compared with totally clean and environmentally friendly online issues, printed newspapers have led to great pollution on people's life due to their harmful composition like lead.
  • Secondly, newspapers are made of wood, to be more precise---trees, which play an important role in refraining people from intaking too many contaminants.
  • While the publication of newspapers causes a great number of trees being cut down, which in turn does harm to people's respiratory system.
  • Thirdly, current affairs on the Internet enables readers to get more instant information via portable devices such as cellphones and computers which are easy to carry without creating any pollution.
  • Finally, online news also provides common people with a more vivid and comprehensive understanding of a certain issue helping them shape objective views towards specific phenomena through colorful pictures and videos.
  • To conclude, it is clear that news on the Internet possesses more merits in comparison with newspapers owing to its portability and environmentally friendly trait.

PLEASE, HELP TO CORRECT EACH SENTENCE! - English

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  • Sentence 1
  • Sentence 2
  • Sentence 3
    • The innovation of social media has changed readers' reading habits with an increasing number of people reading news online rather than on newspapers.
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  • Sentence 4
    • Whereas some people still hold an opposite view on this trend, therefore I would argue that printed newspapers will be superseded by online news in the future.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 4ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 4
  • Sentence 5
    • Firstly, compared with totally clean and environmentally friendly online issues, printed newspapers have led to great pollution on people's life due to their harmful composition like lead.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 5ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 5
  • Sentence 6
    • Secondly, newspapers are made of wood, to be more precise---trees, which play an important role in refraining people from intaking too many contaminants.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 6ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 6
  • Sentence 7
    • While the publication of newspapers causes a great number of trees being cut down, which in turn does harm to people's respiratory system.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 7ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 7
  • Sentence 8
    • Thirdly, current affairs on the Internet enables readers to get more instant information via portable devices such as cellphones and computers which are easy to carry without creating any pollution.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 8ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 8
  • Sentence 9
    • Finally, online news also provides common people with a more vivid and comprehensive understanding of a certain issue helping them shape objective views towards specific phenomena through colorful pictures and videos.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 9ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 9
  • Sentence 10
    • To conclude, it is clear that news on the Internet possesses more merits in comparison with newspapers owing to its portability and environmentally friendly trait.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 10ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 10