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  • Elephant poaching (persuasive article)

  • An elephant is killed every 15 minutes and butchered for its ivory tusks.
  • We can act before it is too late.
  • During the last ten years, the elephant’s population has decreased by more than 70%.
  • The elephant is now a species classified as “endangered” and if no action are taken soon the elephant might completely disappear over the next twenty years.
  • The number of elephant is rapidly declining because the ivory trade is growing considerably and is become today an international trade.
  • The value of raw ivory has tripled in the four last years, reaching an average of 2,100 $ per kilo.
  • A ton of ivory tusks means that ten elephants have been cowardly killed thus 10 tons mean that hundred have been killed.
  • This is a dirty business but this is very lucrative, this why certain poachers do not hesitate to commit such a massacre of innocents elephants.
  • Elephants are more important that you may think: • They are among the most intelligent animals • They have strong emotion • They protect vegetation by helping plants growing • They provide water for other animals by using their tusks to dig for water Elephant are indeed among the most important creatures in the earth.
  • This is our duty to fight against the illegal and cruel elephants poaching.
  • There are many charity organization around the world which care about the elephant cause.
  • Thereby, in order to tackle this inhuman trade and protect the elephants, we should support those charity organizations.
  • There are plenty of organizations which carry out a great work however, the one I would recommend as I know them personally and I can ensure their serious about the elephants is “XXXXX” charity. (Thanks guys)

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    • The elephant is now a species classified as “endangered” and if no action are taken soon the elephant might completely disappear over the next twenty years.
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    • The number of elephant is rapidly declining because the ivory trade is growing considerably and is become today an international trade.
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    • A ton of ivory tusks means that ten elephants have been cowardly killed thus 10 tons mean that hundred have been killed.
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    • This is a dirty business but this is very lucrative, this why certain poachers do not hesitate to commit such a massacre of innocents elephants.
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    • Elephants are more important that you may think: • They are among the most intelligent animals • They have strong emotion • They protect vegetation by helping plants growing • They provide water for other animals by using their tusks to dig for water Elephant are indeed among the most important creatures in the earth.
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    • Thereby, in order to tackle this inhuman trade and protect the elephants, we should support those charity organizations.
      투표하세요!
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    • There are plenty of organizations which carry out a great work however, the one I would recommend as I know them personally and I can ensure their serious about the elephants is “XXXXX” charity. (Thanks guys)
      투표하세요!
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