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  • GRE ( argument essay )

  • In this memo , the manager of WWAC radio station recommends that in order to increase the number of audience in our radio , the radio should change from current rock - music format to news and talk format .
  • To support this recommendation, the manager argues that the current decline in listeners, despite population growth , is due to a fact that most of the newcomers to this area were retirements and they have different tastes .
  • Also, the manager believes that the decline in local sales of recorded music shows that the tastes of people tend to listen to news and talk in our area.
  • This argument is unconvincing for several reasons.
  • First of all, this is very important to understand the real reasons behind a decline in the number of listeners in this area.
  • The memo present that the author assumes that all other conditions in that area that might affect the rate of the listener will remain unchanged after the population growth.
  • This is false assumption that an increase in the retirement population leads to a decrease in the number of radio listeners.
  • This is not a strong reason in order to support manager claim.
  • Perhaps , it is highly possible that new radio has opened in this area and is attracting listener.
  • Even , other Competitor radios may have an attractive strategy in order to growth the number of audiences .If this is the case, changing a format of radio program will not help to increase the number of listeners .
  • , a number of listeners .Thus, this is clear that memo couldn’t provide clear evidence in order to prove.
  • the relation between a decline in listeners numbers and format of the radio.
  • Secondly, the manager assumes that there is a direct link between a decline in local sales of recorded music and limited interest in music .
  • Yet , There is no evidence about a decrease in local sales of rock – music .Perhaps, there is a possibility that sales of others kinds of music have declined .Even there was an increase in local sales of rock – music or decrease .To bolster it they must provide clear evidence the What kind of music recorded has declined in the market ?Consider even the assumption , a decline in local sales of rock – music , is true.
  • If local sales of recorded music declined , it doesn’t mean people don’t have an interest in listening music .
  • Perhaps, new technology such a downloading from online media would be the best reason for this trend .
  • It is very common that people prefer to download all kind of music from an internet because it is cheaper and accessible.
  • Since the author has not accounted for these possibilities, the editorial's recommendation cannot be taken seriously

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  • câu 1
    • In this memo , the manager of WWAC radio station recommends that in order to increase the number of audience in our radio , the radio should change from current rock - music format to news and talk format .
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 1ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 1
  • câu 2
    • To support this recommendation, the manager argues that the current decline in listeners, despite population growth , is due to a fact that most of the newcomers to this area were retirements and they have different tastes .
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 2ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 2
  • câu 3
    • Also, the manager believes that the decline in local sales of recorded music shows that the tastes of people tend to listen to news and talk in our area.
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  • câu 5
    • First of all, this is very important to understand the real reasons behind a decline in the number of listeners in this area.
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  • câu 6
    • The memo present that the author assumes that all other conditions in that area that might affect the rate of the listener will remain unchanged after the population growth.
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  • câu 7
    • This is false assumption that an increase in the retirement population leads to a decrease in the number of radio listeners.
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  • câu 10
    • Even , other Competitor radios may have an attractive strategy in order to growth the number of audiences .If this is the case, changing a format of radio program will not help to increase the number of listeners .
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  • câu 11
    • , a number of listeners .Thus, this is clear that memo couldn’t provide clear evidence in order to prove.
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    • Secondly, the manager assumes that there is a direct link between a decline in local sales of recorded music and limited interest in music .
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  • câu 14
    • Yet , There is no evidence about a decrease in local sales of rock – music .Perhaps, there is a possibility that sales of others kinds of music have declined .Even there was an increase in local sales of rock – music or decrease .To bolster it they must provide clear evidence the What kind of music recorded has declined in the market ?Consider even the assumption , a decline in local sales of rock – music , is true.
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  • câu 15
    • If local sales of recorded music declined , it doesn’t mean people don’t have an interest in listening music .
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  • câu 17
    • It is very common that people prefer to download all kind of music from an internet because it is cheaper and accessible.
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  • câu 18
    • Since the author has not accounted for these possibilities, the editorial's recommendation cannot be taken seriously
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