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  • Playing sports helps to reduce stress

  • Nowadays, most people donot sports.
  • Some people think that playing sports is very useful activity for reducing stress, while others claim that it is a waste of time.
  • In my opinion, doing sports is very useful for a person's health.
  • Firstly, playing sports can be interesting and funny activity.
  • As for me, I forget about my problems when I am doing training.
  • Secondly, scientists claim that when human being is doing sports, a hormone of joy is producing in his organism.
  • Finally, thanks to playing sports people can change their bodies.
  • So, I believe that the results of doing trainings can improvea person's mood.
  • However, some people believe that humans being, who play sports, waste a lot of time.
  • In their view, doing sports is useless activity because it takes an hour and more time to do it.
  • Personally, I do not agree with the above opinion.
  • I am convinced that lack of time is one of the excuses of lazy people.
  • You do not need to pkay sports for an hour because you can do short training, which takes you twenty minutes, and you will feel better.
  • In conclusion, I believe that playing sports is very useful and important activity for the maintenance and strengthening of our mental and physical health.

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