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  • Essay about Zoos are sometimes seen as necessary but not poor a

  • The issue stated by the topic is whether or not keeping animals in the zoos.
  • This is a very important issue because the number of zoos is rising and because the lives of some spices of animals are facing the threat of the extinction.
  • However, I believe animals should live free in the wild and not held in captivity.
  • First, keeping animals in zoos would harm their behavior nature, for example a tiger needs a huge space to adopt and teach their cub how to hunt and protect himself in order to survive, and by keeping him in a cage would definitely kill his skills.
  • Also, I believe animals have the same right as human does to live their free life.
  • It is not fair to take animals from their mother nature and keep them in small enclosures, in order to visit them on weekends to see them.
  • Finally, due to hunting animals from the wild would effect a misbalance in the spices of the animals and moreover they would extinct , for example hunting snakes and keeping them in the zoos would harm the corns by the rats, which would effect the economy of the country.
  • In conclusion, animals should live free in the wild and should not be kept in the zoos in order to bring balance to nature and save them from the extinction.

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    • This is a very important issue because the number of zoos is rising and because the lives of some spices of animals are facing the threat of the extinction.
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    • TAMBAHKAN KOREKSI YANG BARU! - Kalimat 2TAMBAHKAN KOREKSI YANG BARU! - Kalimat 2
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    • First, keeping animals in zoos would harm their behavior nature, for example a tiger needs a huge space to adopt and teach their cub how to hunt and protect himself in order to survive, and by keeping him in a cage would definitely kill his skills.
      Pilih sekarang juga!
    • TAMBAHKAN KOREKSI YANG BARU! - Kalimat 4TAMBAHKAN KOREKSI YANG BARU! - Kalimat 4
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    • Finally, due to hunting animals from the wild would effect a misbalance in the spices of the animals and moreover they would extinct , for example hunting snakes and keeping them in the zoos would harm the corns by the rats, which would effect the economy of the country.
      Pilih sekarang juga!
    • TAMBAHKAN KOREKSI YANG BARU! - Kalimat 7TAMBAHKAN KOREKSI YANG BARU! - Kalimat 7
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    • In conclusion, animals should live free in the wild and should not be kept in the zoos in order to bring balance to nature and save them from the extinction.
      Pilih sekarang juga!
    • TAMBAHKAN KOREKSI YANG BARU! - Kalimat 8TAMBAHKAN KOREKSI YANG BARU! - Kalimat 8