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  • gap year (homework)

  • I would like to take a gap year after high school, before go to college in order to discover the world, others cultures and above all, help people in need to be confronted with reality.
  • I’d like to go to Ethiopia to fetch water or build a well and then, purify water from the well, so Ethiopians could have drinkable water because clean water is scarce over there.
  • We could bring food too and teach people what kind of food is better than the other.
  • But our job wouldn’t be only help them, we would have to show them how they can build a well, purify water, and where they can find food, or how to grow vegetables, because they have to pull themselves together to pull through.
  • On the other hand, it’s not only about help them to find rations, I’d like help them to have an education building schools and training teachers so children might have a better life than their parents.
  • I wouldn’t do this to earn money or get admiration from my family and friends but because I like to feel useful, and see people thankful and happy because of me.
  • An experience like that helps build relationships with people you work with and those for whom you work.
  • It would bring me a lot of knowledge because I think people from developing countries can make us discover a lot of things that we can’t even imagine in developed countries.
  • Moreover it’s a good way to learn a new language and it’s a good thing to put on your CV because that shows that you’re open-minded and that you can work in a team.

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    • I would like to take a gap year after high school, before go to college in order to discover the world, others cultures and above all, help people in need to be confronted with reality.
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    • I’d like to go to Ethiopia to fetch water or build a well and then, purify water from the well, so Ethiopians could have drinkable water because clean water is scarce over there.
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    • But our job wouldn’t be only help them, we would have to show them how they can build a well, purify water, and where they can find food, or how to grow vegetables, because they have to pull themselves together to pull through.
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    • On the other hand, it’s not only about help them to find rations, I’d like help them to have an education building schools and training teachers so children might have a better life than their parents.
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    • I wouldn’t do this to earn money or get admiration from my family and friends but because I like to feel useful, and see people thankful and happy because of me.
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    • It would bring me a lot of knowledge because I think people from developing countries can make us discover a lot of things that we can’t even imagine in developed countries.
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    • Moreover it’s a good way to learn a new language and it’s a good thing to put on your CV because that shows that you’re open-minded and that you can work in a team.
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