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  • Mini Essay: Should the government support the arts?

  • In my opinion the government should help the artist.
  • As a result of this help is infrastructure will be built which could provide the talented people to have place where they can paint, create sculpture and express themself in creativity.
  • I would like to introduce both points of view and at the same time give reason why is the support important for artists.
  • In the first case when the governments do not provide condition for creativity, people have to create a piece of art that could be selling.
  • Sometimes their works become a superficial popularity, because of epatage and glare, without any meaning for the culture.
  • In the second case with the support the situation is different.
  • Now creative people have place where to work, what to eat and how to introduce their piece of art to society.
  • Therefore their arts become more consistent, better perform and more meaningful.
  • In conclusion, the support of the government is the most important thing for artists, because money becomes less important than expression of their soul.

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    • As a result of this help is infrastructure will be built which could provide the talented people to have place where they can paint, create sculpture and express themself in creativity.
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    • I would like to introduce both points of view and at the same time give reason why is the support important for artists.
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    • In the first case when the governments do not provide condition for creativity, people have to create a piece of art that could be selling.
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    • Sometimes their works become a superficial popularity, because of epatage and glare, without any meaning for the culture.
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    • In conclusion, the support of the government is the most important thing for artists, because money becomes less important than expression of their soul.
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