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  • Zoe: She is a wealthy middle age woman, who probably likes to show off her dressmaker’s experienced hands.
  • So, what I have for her is: a black dress which is shorter in the front and decorated by a magenta and golden floral motive at the high of her hips, and also a pair of matching black heels.
  • The election of these colours it is not casual: the golden flowers stand for her ambition of money which will lead her to his death, represented by the black fabric and the red flowers.
  • As accessories she will wear a greyish pearl necklace, pearl earrings and a diamond ring; these represent the wrecks of her shrinking wealth.
  • She has a curly silvery hair and uses a natural makeup combined with a strong red lipstick.
  • The red lips here are very significant, because she will die by drinking her own poison, so again we have this colour meaning blood and death.
  • Robert Really: A professional that deals with mystery, must have an enigmatic style.
  • We want his outfit to make people rapidly understand he is a detective, so in order to achieve this, we are going to appeal to audience’s collective imaginary of what a genuine sleuth must look like.
  • He works outside, in the dark cold night, so nothing fits him better than a black gabardine and trousers which will not just keep him warm, but also will camouflage him in between night’s shadows.
  • Under the gabardine, he wears a white t-shirt and a black tie, and a shine pair of black shoes.
  • This formal style symbolise his seriousness and calculating way of thinking.
  • Accessories and props such as: a deerstalker, a wood pipe, a loupe and white gloves will relate to classic characters of the detective genre, like Sherlock Homes.

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  • Sentence 2
    • So, what I have for her is: a black dress which is shorter in the front and decorated by a magenta and golden floral motive at the high of her hips, and also a pair of matching black heels.
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  • Sentence 3
    • The election of these colours it is not casual: the golden flowers stand for her ambition of money which will lead her to his death, represented by the black fabric and the red flowers.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 3ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 3
  • Sentence 4
    • As accessories she will wear a greyish pearl necklace, pearl earrings and a diamond ring; these represent the wrecks of her shrinking wealth.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 4ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 4
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    • The red lips here are very significant, because she will die by drinking her own poison, so again we have this colour meaning blood and death.
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  • Sentence 8
    • We want his outfit to make people rapidly understand he is a detective, so in order to achieve this, we are going to appeal to audience’s collective imaginary of what a genuine sleuth must look like.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 8ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 8
  • Sentence 9
    • He works outside, in the dark cold night, so nothing fits him better than a black gabardine and trousers which will not just keep him warm, but also will camouflage him in between night’s shadows.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 9ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 9
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  • Sentence 12
    • Accessories and props such as: a deerstalker, a wood pipe, a loupe and white gloves will relate to classic characters of the detective genre, like Sherlock Homes.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 12ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 12