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  • Personal statement for university admission

  • Hi, could anybody tell me if there are any mistakes in the following text and, overall, if it can be easily comprehended?
  • It should be quite a formal text.
  • Thanks in advance.
  • "During my studies in International Cooperation and Development at La Sapienza, I had the opportunity to especially focus on the topic of sustainable development and the potential bonds existing between environment conservation/preservation and socio-economic development.
  • For this reason, I have thought that a further analysis of the above mentioned matter at an academic level could be beneficial both to my perspective career and the comprehension of what sustainability really implies at a practical level.
  • Nevertheless, at the same time, I have become aware of the potential conflicts that may arise between development programs and environment-related ones, which, very often, are perceived as a trade-off and, if not coordinated, could hinder each other.
  • Hence, the importance of a complementary and “holistic” approach that could possibly overcome this impasse, also in the light of the new Sustainable Development Goals.
  • I think that the course could provide me with analytical and practical tools to potentially implement environment-development projects with a high degree of autonomy and confidence.
  • The module “Research methods” would be, in this sense, extremely helpful to get a grasp of the strategies and the modalities to carry out a piece of research in this field (which would later be useful for the research project, as well).
  • Moreover, the chance to implement the knowledge acquired directly on the field (whether in the UK or abroad) could help me get practical experience and understand my potential weaknesses, giving me the time to correct them before the end of the master.
  • In addition, the availability of several optional modules focusing on the economic dimension of environment protection/conservation could surely be an asset in the correct implementation of integrated projects (or better, Integrated Conservation and Development projects), also in view of a better understanding of its importance for socio-economic development by several stakeholders.
  • Finally, I think that Leeds University teaching and evaluation methodologies, which highly differ from those of my previous university, could prompt a more “spontaneous” way of learning, thanks to the presence of several hand-on activities and continuous assessment. "

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    • "During my studies in International Cooperation and Development at La Sapienza, I had the opportunity to especially focus on the topic of sustainable development and the potential bonds existing between environment conservation/preservation and socio-economic development.
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    • AJOUTER une NOUVELLE CORRECTION ! - Phrase 4AJOUTER une NOUVELLE CORRECTION ! - Phrase 4
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    • For this reason, I have thought that a further analysis of the above mentioned matter at an academic level could be beneficial both to my perspective career and the comprehension of what sustainability really implies at a practical level.
      Voter maintenant !
    • AJOUTER une NOUVELLE CORRECTION ! - Phrase 5AJOUTER une NOUVELLE CORRECTION ! - Phrase 5
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    • Nevertheless, at the same time, I have become aware of the potential conflicts that may arise between development programs and environment-related ones, which, very often, are perceived as a trade-off and, if not coordinated, could hinder each other.
      Voter maintenant !
    • AJOUTER une NOUVELLE CORRECTION ! - Phrase 6AJOUTER une NOUVELLE CORRECTION ! - Phrase 6
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    • Hence, the importance of a complementary and “holistic” approach that could possibly overcome this impasse, also in the light of the new Sustainable Development Goals.
      Voter maintenant !
    • AJOUTER une NOUVELLE CORRECTION ! - Phrase 7AJOUTER une NOUVELLE CORRECTION ! - Phrase 7
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    • I think that the course could provide me with analytical and practical tools to potentially implement environment-development projects with a high degree of autonomy and confidence.
      Voter maintenant !
    • AJOUTER une NOUVELLE CORRECTION ! - Phrase 8AJOUTER une NOUVELLE CORRECTION ! - Phrase 8
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    • The module “Research methods” would be, in this sense, extremely helpful to get a grasp of the strategies and the modalities to carry out a piece of research in this field (which would later be useful for the research project, as well).
      Voter maintenant !
    • AJOUTER une NOUVELLE CORRECTION ! - Phrase 9AJOUTER une NOUVELLE CORRECTION ! - Phrase 9
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    • Moreover, the chance to implement the knowledge acquired directly on the field (whether in the UK or abroad) could help me get practical experience and understand my potential weaknesses, giving me the time to correct them before the end of the master.
      Voter maintenant !
    • AJOUTER une NOUVELLE CORRECTION ! - Phrase 10AJOUTER une NOUVELLE CORRECTION ! - Phrase 10
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    • In addition, the availability of several optional modules focusing on the economic dimension of environment protection/conservation could surely be an asset in the correct implementation of integrated projects (or better, Integrated Conservation and Development projects), also in view of a better understanding of its importance for socio-economic development by several stakeholders.
      Voter maintenant !
    • AJOUTER une NOUVELLE CORRECTION ! - Phrase 11AJOUTER une NOUVELLE CORRECTION ! - Phrase 11
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    • Finally, I think that Leeds University teaching and evaluation methodologies, which highly differ from those of my previous university, could prompt a more “spontaneous” way of learning, thanks to the presence of several hand-on activities and continuous assessment. "
      Voter maintenant !
    • AJOUTER une NOUVELLE CORRECTION ! - Phrase 12AJOUTER une NOUVELLE CORRECTION ! - Phrase 12