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  • Personal statement for university admission

  • Hi, could anybody tell me if there are any mistakes in the following text and, overall, if it can be easily comprehended?
  • It should be quite a formal text.
  • Thanks in advance.
  • "During my studies in International Cooperation and Development at La Sapienza, I had the opportunity to especially focus on the topic of sustainable development and the potential bonds existing between environment conservation/preservation and socio-economic development.
  • For this reason, I have thought that a further analysis of the above mentioned matter at an academic level could be beneficial both to my perspective career and the comprehension of what sustainability really implies at a practical level.
  • Nevertheless, at the same time, I have become aware of the potential conflicts that may arise between development programs and environment-related ones, which, very often, are perceived as a trade-off and, if not coordinated, could hinder each other.
  • Hence, the importance of a complementary and “holistic” approach that could possibly overcome this impasse, also in the light of the new Sustainable Development Goals.
  • I think that the course could provide me with analytical and practical tools to potentially implement environment-development projects with a high degree of autonomy and confidence.
  • The module “Research methods” would be, in this sense, extremely helpful to get a grasp of the strategies and the modalities to carry out a piece of research in this field (which would later be useful for the research project, as well).
  • Moreover, the chance to implement the knowledge acquired directly on the field (whether in the UK or abroad) could help me get practical experience and understand my potential weaknesses, giving me the time to correct them before the end of the master.
  • In addition, the availability of several optional modules focusing on the economic dimension of environment protection/conservation could surely be an asset in the correct implementation of integrated projects (or better, Integrated Conservation and Development projects), also in view of a better understanding of its importance for socio-economic development by several stakeholders.
  • Finally, I think that Leeds University teaching and evaluation methodologies, which highly differ from those of my previous university, could prompt a more “spontaneous” way of learning, thanks to the presence of several hand-on activities and continuous assessment. "

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    • "During my studies in International Cooperation and Development at La Sapienza, I had the opportunity to especially focus on the topic of sustainable development and the potential bonds existing between environment conservation/preservation and socio-economic development.
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    • Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 4Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 4
  • Satz 5
    • For this reason, I have thought that a further analysis of the above mentioned matter at an academic level could be beneficial both to my perspective career and the comprehension of what sustainability really implies at a practical level.
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    • Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 5Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 5
  • Satz 6
    • Nevertheless, at the same time, I have become aware of the potential conflicts that may arise between development programs and environment-related ones, which, very often, are perceived as a trade-off and, if not coordinated, could hinder each other.
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    • Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 6Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 6
  • Satz 7
    • Hence, the importance of a complementary and “holistic” approach that could possibly overcome this impasse, also in the light of the new Sustainable Development Goals.
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    • Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 7Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 7
  • Satz 8
    • I think that the course could provide me with analytical and practical tools to potentially implement environment-development projects with a high degree of autonomy and confidence.
      Jetzt abstimmen!
    • Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 8Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 8
  • Satz 9
    • The module “Research methods” would be, in this sense, extremely helpful to get a grasp of the strategies and the modalities to carry out a piece of research in this field (which would later be useful for the research project, as well).
      Jetzt abstimmen!
    • Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 9Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 9
  • Satz 10
    • Moreover, the chance to implement the knowledge acquired directly on the field (whether in the UK or abroad) could help me get practical experience and understand my potential weaknesses, giving me the time to correct them before the end of the master.
      Jetzt abstimmen!
    • Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 10Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 10
  • Satz 11
    • In addition, the availability of several optional modules focusing on the economic dimension of environment protection/conservation could surely be an asset in the correct implementation of integrated projects (or better, Integrated Conservation and Development projects), also in view of a better understanding of its importance for socio-economic development by several stakeholders.
      Jetzt abstimmen!
    • Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 11Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 11
  • Satz 12
    • Finally, I think that Leeds University teaching and evaluation methodologies, which highly differ from those of my previous university, could prompt a more “spontaneous” way of learning, thanks to the presence of several hand-on activities and continuous assessment. "
      Jetzt abstimmen!
    • Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 12Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 12